The Crate


The smoke makes it difficult to breathe.  Where is my human?  Why is she screaming outside instead of helping me?

Blaring noises and blinking lights scare me.  I crawl away into the dark, to my crate, to safety.  I curl up on my pillow and whimper as the smoke in the air thickens.

A monster bursts through the door.  I bite at its thick hide, but it doesn’t care – it just grabs me and drags me outside where I see her.

“Human!” I bark.  “Human!”

I break free of the monster’s grasp and leap into my human’s protective arms.


This was written for the November 29th challenge on the Carrot Ranch – ‘Into the Dark.’  While I was instantly reminded of Devil in the Dark, an episode of Star Trek: The Original Series, I thought about my fear of fire as a child and how children hide from the fire by going to closets and dark places.  Feeling that a child trapped in a fire might be too much for a daily flash, I wrote from the perspective of a dog.

13 thoughts on “The Crate

  1. Jade M. Wong says:

    Oh my gosh, this is brilliant. This story gripped my heart and I felt like was I was there, feeling the dog’s fear and worry. It was a great idea to write from the dog’s perspective.

    • H.R.R. Gorman says:

      Losing pets in a fire is scary. My friend’s parents almost lost their house and a cat that refused to leave during the prior batch of fires. These fires, while in a different place, are still horrible.

  2. Charli Mills says:

    What a doozy of a flash you’ve written, H.R.R.! You’ve mastered which elements to reveal and which ones to leave out. To me, that’s why flash fiction can be powerful — it invites the reader in with crisp details but also allows the reader to complete the story. My mind went instantly to the California wildfires, imaging the flames as the monster. Well done!

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