Shimmer of sunlight
O’er twilight clouds.
Darkness in the east,
Hope in the west
Where lies the frontier.
This gogyohka was written for Colleen’s Tanka Tuesday #189, poet’s choice! I decided to participate this week because, as I was driving home yesterday, the sky was very brilliant. I wanted to contrast sunset, frontier, and the idea that west is “death”, the last adventure.
This picture was taken last year just before Hurricane Dorian came by. It’s not the same as what I saw last night, but a hurricane sky isn’t like anything else and I thought I’d share.
I like this… beyond the like of the click
Oh, nice! I think when I get inspired by something, the poem turns out nicer – even if I don’t spend as much time on it! This one was one of those that “popped out”.
Oh, I’m glad I’m not alone in having poems that ‘pop out’
Haha – well, if your recent poetry was popped out, it was good!
There’s only been one recent poem that, having popped out, I then worked out. Truly, they do pop out fully formed. At most I might tweak a word or two
I find poems so very hard to edit. I’m not really good at poetry, most of the time.
I don’t really think about. Despite evidence to contrary, I don’t think of myself as a poet. Just some things are easier to express that way. Otherwise, a simple rhymer, more of a songwriter, I suppose you might say
This Sedative for the Soul is the one I worked on. I wanted to get it bang on right
It did turn out well, indeed.
Thank you. I had reason fo wanting that to be perfect
I think my head is much like an egg… within it poems emerge to take on forms, are tweaked and, without me knowing, mulled upon. And out they pop, fully formed. Or maybe the womb is a bettr analogy.
Lovely poem; sometimes the shortest ones are the best!
Thank you! I was definitely inspired by a touch of nature to do this one.
Gorgeous sunset, gorgeous poem.
Thank you! I sometimes get an itching to do something cool. 😉
It does look like a destination, especially with the silhouettes. Shimmer is just the right word. (K)
Thanks! I think it turned out well.
You nailed it, HRR. I love the contrasting darkness and hope and the idea of a frontier between them. A wonderful gogyohka. 🙂
Thank you! I find natural inspiration helps a lot.
Yup. Me too. 🙂
Wow! Look at that sky! Those hurricane skies are so beautiful. This is an excellent gogyohka with the perfect breathy phrases. Love it!
Thank you! After reading other people’s gogyohka, I think the idea behind the form became clearer.
A wonderful poem…and that sky is magnificent.
Thank you! Once in a while I can pop out a good photo full of lightwires and houses covering up something actually cool, haha
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This is such a pretty photo of the sky on fire, and in some other angles, it does look like the sky is lighting a path to the next frontier.
Secret – that sky is a sunrise, haha
Beautifully written. Love the poesy.
Thank you! Enjoyed writing it.
You are so very welcome. Have a great day.